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The Secret of the Mooncake

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The Secret of the Mooncake
 
The Secret of the Mooncake

Winson Pan, The Hong Kong Polytechnic University


Prelude

A baker named Mr. Wong comes to a small town and opens an intriguing bakery; it sells unpalatable bread, but its mooncake is incredibly delicious. Just why is the mooncake so popular? Daniel, a young baker addicted to the mooncake, uncovers the hidden secrets in this short fantasy story.


 

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BIO

Winson Pan Jiayi is a student learning environmental subjects at The Hong Kong Polytechnic University. He enjoys traveling, reading and watching movies in his leisure. Detective novels, cartoons and animation are his favorite genres.

REFLECTION

It was around mid-autumn festival when the author started to conceive this story while studying the course ELC1A04, From The Lord of the Rings to Harry Potter: Fantasy, Reality and Humanity. The festive occasion provided inspiration. The Chinese myth about the moon goddess Chang E, and the historical moment of Neil Armstrong’s first step on the moon also contributed ideas to the story.

  1. Rebecca says:

    Interesting story , I like it

  2. Christine Burns says:

    Congratulations Winson on your story winning the Readers’ Choice Award!

  3. Your writing style is pretty plain and down-to-earth, which may or may not be a compliment. Grammatical mistakes eg. “seldom could be seen”, “curiosity aroused with looking at the sky”, but can be condoned. In this I mean you convey your story very clearly and accessibly, though I’d like to see a bit of pop in your descriptions.
    As for the plot, I can overlook the parts where you’d describe to be “ridiculous” and view it as merits of creative writing. Despite of that, I’d still find it hard to believe that Mr Wong would hire the subordinates of a direct competitor. I wasn’t pleased with the way you present the unbelievable twist, no spoilers, by having the character articulate a lengthy monologue, in lieu of showing it in a more subtle manner.
    The overall tone feels a bit uneven, since your writing style is pretty lively and jolly throughout except some points where stuff you describe is bleak and heavy, which doesn’t blend well.
    The creativity is the main selling point of this work, and I appreciate the touches of Lemony Snicket at the beginning and the adeptly written ending. 6/10

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